Dialogue Practice

Kia Ora Readers!
This week we had a writer's workshop on Dialogue in Literacy.  We had to write a dialogue between two people planning a trip, and then go back and add action that showed them packing.  I tried to make each character stand out with their own personality based on what they said and did.  Let me know what you think and if there is anything you would do differently.

#1

“Do you think we’re going to need jackets?” asks Chris holding
up two puffer jackets.

“Its summer, so no, but maybe a cardigan?” suggests

Lily, she grabbed the jackets and put them back on the hook.

“OK, you can wear that, but I’m going to wear a hoodie!” Chris
said.

“OK!, how about snacks for the plane?” asks Lily

“We need to get through customs so we can buy it at the
airport.”

“Togs?” asks Lily “maybe a surfboard!”

“Hell Yeah!” said Chris, already running out to the garage and
grabbing his surfboard

“I’ll grab the togs!” says Lily

“I’ll get some goggles from the store!”

“Ok, so we’re all set!”

#2

“LILY!? WHERES MY HAIR GEL?” shouted Chris while
looking through the bathroom

“I already packed it for you, dumbo!” Lily says holding up
Chris’s hair gel

“hair dryer?” he says both walking into Lily's Bedroom

“Yep.”

“Comb?” he asks leaning on the doorway

“Done,” Lily says carefully folding her favourite T-Shirt

“Ok then! I guess you’ve packed my clothes for me then?”

“EW NO! I’m not touching your disgusting clothing!” she
replies

“Awe,” said Chris, Disappointment in his voice, as he walks
back into his bedroom to pack

“Yeessssss!” Lily whispers holding up her brand new
surfboard