Kia Ora Ashes!
Fir literacy, you all know we've been doing science. But I didn't complete my experiment on time :( So instead of writing a report of my experiment, I wrote a review on other people's research.
To the review:
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Anyway:
Hi Jayde,
ReplyDeleteYour review sounds and looks really good, your punctuation and spelling is really good too. It has a lot of detail added into it too. Maybe next time you could make it a little less complicated to read for people that don't know much about stars. As well you could add more questions that you want to find out.
Kia Ora Jayde!
ReplyDeleteYour review was really interesting! Your grammar and punctuation was great! I thought it was cool how you organised it. Maybe next time you could add in a introduction and conclusion. Other than that it was great!
~ Gaia :3 (I have to be anonymous because it won't let me use my actual account:()